08-03-2009, 10:18 AM | #1 |
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Tybee Island
I've given myself an evening off, so drove from Bluffton, South Carolina to Tybee Island. I wanted to see the ocean. The waves are wild, because another thunderstorm is here. So I've retreated to a seafood restaurant, and I'm having a beer while I watch lightning strike the water.
I feel profoundly alone, but not in a sad way. I sometimes feel like this after a lot of travel, like my body is waiting for my soul to catch up with it. San Diego, Chicago, Atlanta, Augusta, Savannah - a tired litany of airport lounges. I will be exhausted, sitting somewhere, and feel myself softly settle back into my bones. I look around me at the strangers in their touristy beach outfits and fried fish platters, and I love them. Let the wind blow. I'm here, this is now, I'm alive and free. Tourists and troubadours, road warriors and vagabonds, raise your beers with me. I am your brother. the indigo afterimage of the lightning's flash - her subtle perfume |
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Be careful, you are close to crossing the line between poet and philosopher. In your case, that is a good thing - the post was just lovely.
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Very profound . . . and lovely.
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Whatever it is, beginning of short story, diary entry, prose poem, I want more of it and soon!!
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It's a poetic form called "haibun", which is a mixture of lyrical prose and "linked" haiku. The haiku is inspired by and related to the prose, but not part of the narrative.
So I guess in the above, the overall theme is that of trying to hold onto something, a feeling, to capture something, if only for a moment, that you know will soon fade, whether it is one of those brief moments of peace, of feeling connected with everyone, or the afterimage of a lightning strike, or the way she smelled the last time you were with her. |
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""Piqued", I think you mean.
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