03-17-2014, 08:34 PM | #181 |
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I still need to review two stories and start the rewrite of my own. I'll be done before March 31st, but I have a feeling that I'm unable to get started on my rewrite before Wednesday. Damnations; I've got a lot of work to do which I didn't plan (and which originally wasn't mine either ) Sorry that I'm absent for such a long time without giving any more input |
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I'm editing an older SF story now for my second contribution. I ditched the fantasy one that I was originally considering after I obscured every page with editing pencil... Graham |
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03-18-2014, 08:45 AM | #183 |
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I hadn't given much thought to a second story, I had hoped there would be more authors participating and it would not be an issue. Given my own work pressures, and other issues getting in the way of my writing, I can't see me writing something new in any reasonable time.
I do have a longer work that just might get finished in time, but it looks like it might come out around 20k words - and it is very odd (the closest to horror I've written). No one else has seen anything of it yet, so there is a chance it might get discarded; I won't know whether I think it is publishable until I've finished it. By both its length and its nature it may be inappropriate to this anthology. I've been struggling with it for months (for various reasons, the nature of the story is just one of them), but I think it's one of those things I have to get out of my system before I can move on. |
03-18-2014, 12:22 PM | #184 |
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I've uploaded my second story, another light SF contribution called "Cutting It Fine", to the DropBox folder.
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03-18-2014, 06:59 PM | #186 |
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Vera's Itch, 1.2
Original story As all the kinks have been worked out of it already, I'll post some more general comments. Most of them could come down to a matter of taste, though. Spoiler:
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03-18-2014, 09:06 PM | #188 |
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It is unclear to me how long Vera has been physical at that point in time. It's not clear if there was physical contanct the day before. If there was (or could have been, in some way), 'long time' does not feel correct here.
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Is it really that confusing? Do I need to do something more to explain it? |
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The Road by the River
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I've uploaded my second story, The Road by the River. It's about 1875 words. |
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Cutting it Fine
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You had me wondering what was going to happen right away. That's good. What is it about cutting the girls' hair that would ruin their business? Spoiler:
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Thanks Jim. I'm just about to put my comments on "The Road by the River" up. Graham |
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Thanks, Graham. I'll get back to this later today.
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03-20-2014, 04:22 PM | #195 |
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Dave
Sorry for the MIA guys, but as you all probably know by now, you simply can't get rid of me.
Okay, I uploaded a new story. Hope sir Jacob and others check it out This one is a lame duck compared to my first story but I'm sure Sir Graham can fix it in no time. [As far as the first version is concerned, boredom is guaranteed ] Dave - v.1-0 Also I have finished the editing and other tweaks on my first story: When My Father 'Died' - v.2-0 |
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